Comment on The Amalgamation of Ardour and Abhorrence

  1. Cryptographic_Delurk Sat 20 Jan 2024 09:08PM UTC

    "Instead of the cross, the Albatross, about my neck was hung." Coleridge. The Rime of the Ancient Mariner.

    You know, I'm usually more into piss porn where the dom is pissing on the sub. But you know what? This was really just perfect for these two characters :') Togami's overwhelming pride. It was, ah, terribly satisfying to see him lose his composure and humiliate himself here with Shou (and enjoy it despite himself). In a lot of ways his role in the first game is just hyping himself up to get knocked down a peg or twelve :')

    There are so many good lines in this.

    He thought he resented Touko's eyes, watery and skittish, ringed with those hideous dark circles. This was worse. Unearned confidence was a far uglier feature…

    and

    "Oh Master, you make it sound like I enjoy punishing you..." The sadness in her frown didn't reach those red eyes, but the vicious grin that distorted her face a moment later did. "Which is totally true! Handsome men always look better when they're all wrapped up! Kyeehahaha!"

    Just... the whole dynamic. Shou's uninhibited joy, both in making Valentines with him and tying puppy up and knocking him around. I also really love the moment where Byakuya commits to the fact that she's taken down men older and heavier than her, and he doesn't really have a chance at physically overpowering her.

    And for all that, I think it also really added to things where Shou manages to be a bit sheepish at the end. Like she didn't actually mean to push him so far he pissed himself. That little bit of concern she has there really is *chef's kiss*.

    Thanks so much for writing. This was a blast to read.

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    1. SucculentStrawberries Fri 09 Aug 2024 01:42AM UTC

      Thank you so much for commenting! <333 I'm just sort of coming back from a hiatus, but just know back when I got the email for this comment it made my day! ;u; I hope you've been well lately!~

      I'm thrilled you enjoyed the story so much! It really is just so fun to knock him down twelve pegs lmao XD (and yesss I'm glad you picked up on him enjoying it a little too- even if in DEEP denial about it lol).

      I'm so happy you liked those lines aaa <3

      Their dynamic together is so interesting to me, it was a lot of fun to explore that~ I'm happy you enjoyed it!!!

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