wahhh I love this first chapter <3 incredibly vivid opening where Cassian’s conflict with orders is on display, love the detail in the part of him taking an officer down, and then when he finds Melshi I 🥺🥺🥺 I knew he’d be fine but the feeling of recognition and fear in Cassian felt tangible. And this part:
“He could walk away now and keep pretending he would still meet that gaze somewhere else someday. On some world where Cassian had never been before - a place where no trouble had ever followed him.”
that sweet denial really got to me
I also love Melshi essentially thinking that if he saw Cassian again it would be in heaven. me too man
anyway love this and can’t wait to see where they go next :)
Ahhhhh thank you so much for this wonderful comment!!! The first scene in this chapter was the hardest scene for me to write in the whole fic (action sequences are not my forte...I had to rewrite that bit with Cassian taking down the guard on the ground A NUMBER of times), so it means a lot to hear that it felt clear and detailed to you.
And ughhhhh yes, the moment of denial. Of course Cassian is going to leave no stone unturned in the end (no matter how sure he feels that there's no chance of saving anyone: he has to try), but I wanted to capture something of the horror he might have felt in finding Melshi among the dead and of what an agonizing contrast that would be compared to the fantasy he's been harboring - of Melshi alive and untouched by any of the violence Cassian's been living with. I'm really happy that landed for you.
Thank you so much for reading and for taking the time to leave these lovely words!!! I really hope you will enjoy the chapters to come. <3<3<3
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